Wfb: Chapter 93

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Chapter 93: Some people just have ideas that are too advanced for mere mortals to understand; but I wonder how many of those ideas actually succeed

Ragnall has a tense smile on his face.

“So while we were doing work, you were playing truant here.”

“Hm? That’s rude. I was definitely working while helping in the forge …”

“Which is basically playing, for you.”

That last bit was Hibiki. Grinning cheekily.

She’s starting to have a personality like a cheeky younger sister. If she didn’t have that kind of modified body, I wonder if she would have appealed to those that like them younger. Not the lolicon crowd, but the ones into just-barely-still-juveniles … she said she was actually just about to take her high school exams, so I guess technically she’d still be a middle schooler.

But when she said she was a high-schooler, I didn’t question it because her body was well-developed in this world.

“Anyway, I managed to negotiate with them so we can work independently.”

Ragnall looks tired.

“Ah… good job? You’ve worked hard.”

I hand over my tea cup, and Ragnall just grimaces before he gulps the rest of it down.

Oh, amazing, he drained off all the herbs in the bottom too.

“Hm? That man there … is the White Demon?!”

Ah… is that going to be a problem – I guess not. The wolf(?) beastkin’s tail is wagging.

“I’m amazed you’re still working here, Trelzt. And don’t call me that.”

“No, well… Sword! Can I see your latest sword forged by Helward-sama, please?!”

Ah. That’s right. Ragnall goes through swords like they’re disposable chopsticks sometimes… Anyway, it seems like this wolf(?) beastkin’s name is Trelzt, and he at least knows of Ragnall’s reputation.

“Well… I don’t mind, but you were working with a master bladesmith approved by Helward himself, you know? Isn’t that more important?”

Ragnall said while unhitching his sword and handing it over.

Oi oi, is it okay to just hand something that’s supposed to be your cherished partner over so easily? That’s one thing that annoys me about Ragnall. Daggers are consumables, and swords are damaged way too easily; even if they aren’t going to be your lifetime partners, I’d like you to treat them with more care…

Ma, this wolf(?) beastkin seems trustworthy enough as a smith, and it sounds like they have some history, so I guess it’s best to just not mind it.

Trelzt looks at Ragnall with wide eyes, then at me, then back at Ragnall.

“Eh?! This lad is?!”

“-Pu! He called Jun ‘lad’!”

Hibiki-chan giggled.

Oh, come to think of it, he did, didn’t he?

“I’m surprised. You’re the first person to (accurately) guess that.”

I mumbled the (accurately) part really really softly.

Trelzt slowly turned red in the face as he realized his mistake(?).

“Oh, I’m so embarrassed… although your scent was vaguely female, your aura was something not feminine. We get some people with deep-elf blood sometimes, so I gotta be careful with my assumptions, y’know.”

No, you still made an assumption… maa, I don’t really care either way, but you were the first person to assume I was a guy.

…Hm? Should I be happy about that or upset?

Somehow, the less I’ve started caring about being identified as a girl, the more I’ve become confused about how I should feel about it. Although this time is the opposite from the other times.

“I know, I know what you mean, Trelzt. I forget she’s a girl all the time.”

Mu. I think I’m insulted by that one. Because I feel like Ragnall’s saying it to be slightly insulting on purpose.

After Trelzt worshipped Ragnall’s sword (it was kind of creepy), and then made me promise to come back to the forge later, it was time for business.

Or rather, it was time for Ragnall and Hibiki-chan to brief me about what happened at the Wardens HQ.

It was also time for an early lunch. Since we had been traveling overnight, it makes sense that we’re hungry now.

Since we’re now moving separately from Orvowel and his assistant, we just go ahead and eat in the inn’s eatery without looking for them.

“Well, it was annoying, but I managed to negotiate so that we’re moving independently from the Wardens. We’re basically going to be doing a standard Guild quest for investigation.”

Ragnall said.

“I see. I get that it’s beneficial, but tell me why.”

I’ve gotten better at asking questions in the 2+ months I’ve been here. Yay~.

“If we move with the Wardens, it will be something like becoming part of a squadron. I don’t really like that kind of work; it’s why I quit being a merc. By taking it through the quest, we’re guaranteed of payment even if we don’t find anything important, so we won’t waste any work.”

“I see… un. It may be preferable to avoid becoming part of a squadron. It will make it easier to leave if we can’t find anything. It would suck to be stuck here for months.”

I said, after thinking it over.

“Right. They weren’t happy about it, but, well, we’re adventurers not soldiers, so they’ll just have to deal with it.”

Ragnall gulped down his ale as he finished his statement.

I guess we’re not going out right away, since he’s drinking.

Hibiki-chan delicately sipped on her water, then said,

“It was a little weird in there… it was really tense, and I didn’t really like how some of them were looking at us.”

“Sorry, that’s probably my fault.”

Ragnall admitted with a scowl.

“Well, others were also looking like they met a big celebrity, so it was just all kinds of weird.”

Hibiki-chan quickly said.

Un… I wondered about that.  Ragnall’s more or less famous. But,

“It wasn’t because you’re… you know, part…”

“Nah. Although some of the more sensitive elves can tell, most people don’t know it. Just young ones thinking I’ll take their glory, or others who heard about stuff I’ve done, I bet.”

Young ones… you’re not that old yourself, Ragnall.

“So, I know Jun’s fine, but we’re not going to go out right away, are we? I’m tired.”

Hibiki-chan said, stifling a yawn.

“No, only Jun can just keep going without sleeping. I bet Orvowel and Leimon are napping, too. I say we start at dusk. It’s a dangerous hour to head out, but I think we can handle it.”

Ragnall said.

How rude. You two are treating me like some kind of freak.

We finish our meal in silence, and as we were sitting around, digesting,

“It’s worrying.”

To Ragnall’s mutter, I asked,

“What is?”

“This situation is. Did you hear that the victims were all mangled and drained when they were found?”

Un, I did, from Eloise.

When I nodded, Ragnall continued.

“Normally, when there’s major demon activity to be concerned about, they’re dragging people back to be their mana-cattle. Killing and torturing people outright … well, what do you think?”

I rest my chin on my hands and think about it.

“Un. Sounds like they’re planning to invade. And not in the clever way.”

I finally say.

“Eh? What do you mean?”

Hibiki-chan asks.

“Like… a bandits trying to take over a village template; it’s that kind of feeling.”

I explained.

“Ah… I understand now.”

As expected, she understood with just that.

“… I’m not sure what you two are on about, but as you can see, it’s kind of bad. If it’s not stopped, there could be a war between Orelia and Arcene. When you think about how all the countries on Orelia are all fighting with each other, and the fact that you can’t really predict where the Boundary will be breached, it’s not a good deal.”

Well, we’re not really sure it’s demons, even, so I think it’s a little too early to be worrying about war.


“Since Nyl City is an undesirable place for most countries, it is also the safest place to establish our base without any interference.”

“Even so, there’s still no question that Nyl City isn’t a good place to cultivate medicinal plants.”

“But it is a good place for minerals and gems. And I have an interest in how some of the industries here can help us.”


It was in a small conference room in Nyl City’s Guild Hall where this conversation was taking place.

Although the only two people in it were Lor and Seimei.

All across the conference tables and desks were maps, papers, and property blueprints. That was why they borrowed the room.

Despite Seimei having a moderately nice house in Nyl City, it was still cramped and didn’t have enough room to spread everything out to look at. That’s how houses in this type of mountainous city are.

Seimei and Lor were discussing logistics.

It was all because Seimei’s plans were bigger than Lor could ever have dreamed of.

Medical instruction, tools, cultivation of materials, data organization – Lor couldn’t help but feel that this kind of knowledge, even though it might just be surface knowledge, this kind of knowledge was the crystallization of hundreds, maybe thousands, of years of research.

Compared to that…

Here, our people are only concerned with making life luxurious while they’re alive. It’s shameful, this feeling like he’s stooping to our level and trying to forcibly raise our level of medical knowledge to a level he finds satisfactory.

Lor kept those kinds of thoughts to himself.

It wasn’t like surgery was COMPLETELY unheard of, but few people would cut new wounds into a body. If you were going to do something like that it’s usually an amputation, when the whole limb is lost, to keep the rot from spreading.

When Seimei matter-of-factly talked about cutting someone open to fix something within, like just casually opening up a magic tool to correct a circuit, Lor felt his jaw drop in surprise.

Why would you further damage someone?! And blood vessels – although he hadn’t heard such a concrete theory about them before, but what do you mean about sewing them together?!

Lor felt like his brain was constantly about to collapse under the ideas Seimei was introducing him to.

He had never felt more relieved when Seimei concluded his treatise on surgeries with,

“Well, there are surgeries an amateur can’t do, so we should focus on things like bone-setting and foreign object removal at first. And consumable medicines. The mana diseases worry me, and for that I think you would be more well-read on those.”

“Yes, well, it is definitely impossible to implement everything that Sir Seimei has thought of all at once…”

The things that Lor wanted to get started on right away was non-magic anesthetic, disinfectant, and pills. There were some herbal medications, but carrying powder was a pain, and not everyone could afford the magic-based alternatives.

Not to mention, magic effects are easily corrupted when the caster is no longer present, and magic treatments used simultaneously would often times interfere with each other. Magic poisoning, different from Ragnall’s mana poisoning, was all too common, and turned many people away from any but the most urgent medical treatment.

To be frank, if it wasn’t Light Magic, most magic used for medical ventures often had side effects that couldn’t be ignored, and the magic power consumption was too grave for the average magician. For anesthesia, nobles might require 2-3 mages to continuously cast <Numb>, one after another, to be able to make it for 30 minutes.

Although Lor had his suspicions about Seimei’s magic pool… well, whatever the case, Lor had a strong interest in making many things non-magical.

But what greatly fascinated Lor was this ‘Chemistry’ that Seimei talked about.

Breaking down substances; this was what alchemists only briefly entertained. To go from something that seemed like it was all made of one thing, but being able to divide it further… Even though he didn’t understand everything about it, Lor knew instinctively that this kind of knowledge had the potential to save lives.

But, anyway, the current discussion had nothing to do with that.

It was a discussion about where to build their first base for research.

In front of them was a map of Nyl City, marked with the places that Seimei was considering buying.

It’s just…

Before anything else, we should work to improve on the supply of things that we will need. The greatest concern is securing ingredients – Side Lor.

Before anything else, we should secure a place where research can prosper. The greatest concern is stability and availability of skilled people – Side Seimei.

For side Lor, Nyl City is an inconvenient place because of the limitations of medicinal herbs. Even in the Labyrinth, you can only find them on the 2nd and 7th level. Compared to other Labyrinths, Nyl Labyrinth had the worst herb concentration. Although that’s not saying too much, since all the other Labyrinths overflowed with flora on all levels. Nyl Labyrinth was truly a mineral paradise, not a vegetation one. Lor was eager to establish a base that could research the cultivation of many medicinal herbs that were as of yet difficult for people to produce. This was why many medicines were so expensive.

For side Seimei, Nyl City is the best place. Countries were far more interested in the other Labyrinths full of riches and wider varieties of resources, and the terrain made sieging the city difficult at best. Nyl was the only Labyrinth-based Unaffiliated territory where a country, Carnus, was allowed to establish its presence. Coincidentally, Seimei was allied with Carnus. Furthermore, many researchers, like Lor, would come to this relative place of safety to do their research. In fact, Lor often traveled between Tren City and Nyl City for this reason.

There’s also the matter with the glass artisans… but this was something Seimei had yet to discuss with the glass workers themselves, so he refrained from talking about it to Lor. Since glass had a bad reputation.

“It seems we’ll have to have a branch here and a branch there…”

Seimei mused.

Seimei, a business elite, was used to an idea like that.

Lor, a poor researcher, was not.

“That’s right… with my current capital I can purchase one of these four places and have remodeling done. You were saying we should investigate a location in Tren… Fine. The others of my house will be visiting Nyl soon, so they can house sit for a couple months. We will go to Tren.”

Lor found himself gaping.

“Nonono, if you’re not going to use it right away, there’s no need to buy it! At least, not such a big plot! That will use up all your money, right?”

Seimei laughed confidently.

“It’s an investment, an investment. If you buy one part, then go to buy the other part later, it’s easier for the landowner to raise the price.”

“That’s… no, that’s true, I have heard of people doing that…”

“Such an extravagant purchase, with a large-scale remodeling rumored to be a research facility… other solo researchers like you would be drawn in, no? I suppose personnel screening would be an issue then… ma, it’s better to cast a wide net. Since it’s Nyl City, the benefits of those rumors would outweigh the demerits. A facility not within Carnus, but moderately within Carnus’ reach… it could be better, but I think it should suffice.”

Lor’s head hurt. It wasn’t just Jun; all of her countrymen were crazy.

He complained for the sake of his common sense.

“Even so, there’s still the problem that all of the renovations and land purchases will use almost all of your personal money. I doubt borrowing from Carnus will go well; you’ll need an escort to go to Tren, and when dealing with those who cultivate the libalm, you’ll need a sizable amount of money as well…”

Seimei smiled. Lor was starting to have chills whenever he smiled.

“I just registered as an adventurer. There will be no problems on that end.”

Although he had let Jun take almost all of the materials from their blitz through the Water Corridor, it wasn’t just because Seimei was being altruistic, or because she was making him and all the other gamers near-legendary equipment for free. He was a businessman, after all.

No, he let go of that potential gold mine without batting an eye because he was confident that he could raise that much again without any trouble at all.

The business mind of an elite business man from Japan had met with the freedom of raising capitol as a fantasy adventurer.

It was a way of thinking that Lor couldn’t ever hope to emulate.

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<a/n: Thank you Raist and SilverWolfCurse for your donations!
Umu. Here is the part of the story where I planned Seimei’s side of the story more diligently than Jun’s and just thought, Oh, I’ll figure it out when I get to it. Well, I’m here. Brain, think fast.
Maa, I say that, but I do have a vague outline… haa. Past self, work harder next time.
Well, without Seimei’s story, it’s questionable if I would have ever bothered fixing the ruin of a story that eventually became wfb, because it helped a LOT with world building.
(And gendbending the MC helped me want to write it, since I wanted to explore the trope from the pov of a more or less asexual character)

Fun fact: My initial vers of wfb was based on Konjiki Moji no Tsukai for a NaNoWriMo challenge (it was supposed to be a write-then-trash story done purely for practice since I hadn’t written in years, and then I was going to delete it, so I didn’t care about stealing ideas at the time. It was called Flower Blades.)
The Jun character was an actual girl called Akane, and she was supposed to be haughty and arrogant. Unfortunately, she went past haughty and arrogant and just turned into a horrible human being. She didn’t act like a Queen or a bitch (which, honestly, would have been much better and far more entertaining), but just threw tantrums the entire time like a 5-year-old with social disorders. I actually started hating her as a person.
And with an obsession for forging and disposition to ignore everything that didn’t interest her, as well as a distaste for troublesome things like traveling … the story went nowhere. At all. She just wanted to be in the forge 24/7.
Also, the world-build was … mumble mumble … non-existent, so there were a lot of problems… but anyway, the main character didn’t help me want to make it better.
But that’s why Hibiki’s character was so difficult to nail down. Her initial timid-but-capable-in-tough-spots personality was supposed to be a foil to that Akane character, and actually make the story… go… somewhere.
(I will say the yuri was stronger with that pair, but, maa, if the story tanked 10 chaps in, what can ya do.) At least that kind of transition from timid to not is pretty realistic for what she ended up going through in wfb, so I don’t see any need to worry about it too much. Or like, I think it would have been harder to pull it off if I consciously tried to write the transition in…
Btw, Masaki was initially the stupid Hero that gets misled the entire time… kukuku. He’s in a much better place now. Ragnall had a more noble feel to him, but was generally the same. Aside from that, all the other characters are original to the wfb version.
Sometimes I wonder if you can even say those two stories are related, they’re so different…
Anyway, this is why I don’t do NaNoWriMo anymore. I hate writing stories that go nowhere fast.
And there is a new cursed chapter>



  1. Yea i wouldn’t be all that worried about finances in his place either, it’s like starting a game with all the best gear and lvl cap, turning down the rewards from an easy low lvl quest is no problem 😀

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      1. Hmm I think I should rephrase unbreakable as comparison to another novel which features that thought that unbreakable=breaks everything else. By unbreakable I mean durable enough to sustain Ragnall’s constant abuse without breaking so frequently for repairs


      2. I’m thinking if he can break any material, and any type of material can wear down against other materials, Jun would have to come up with a sword that is not made of any materials. Like some kinda ultimate force field barrier sword.


      3. The biggest problem is materials. Jun has a few ideas but it requires stuff that is in chronic short supply if sold at all. You know legendary materials like orichalcum and the amounts of materials needed needs to be more then for 1 blade due to experiments with alloys.


      4. The better question is ‘how’. You know that’s what we’ll be wanting to read, anyway.


  2. Chapter 93: Some people just have “a” ideas that are too advanced for mere mortals to understand; but I wonder how many of those ideas actually succeed
    Chapter 93: Some people just have ideas that are too advanced for mere mortals to understand; but I wonder how many of those ideas actually succeed

    Ah. That’s right. Ragnall goes through “sword” like they’re disposable chopsticks sometimes…
    Ah. That’s right. Ragnall goes through “swords” like they’re disposable chopsticks sometimes…

    Ragnall said while “handing” unhitching his sword and handing it over.
    Ragnall said while unhitching his sword and handing it over.

    good job and thank you


  3. I like the author’s commentary at the end! 8D
    As an asexual agender who used to be very trans as a child but eventually stopped caring somewhere in my teens, there’s that and some more that I can relate to Jun with. But I was dearly hoping for Jun to be a romantic asexual and shippy with some also asexual gal. YURI 4 LYFE :V It had seemed to me like Hibiki was being set up for that, but now with the idea of her being a middle schooler, I’m not on board anymore… xD So yeah um. A story about an aromantic asexual suddenly became more appealing… hooray?


    1. I was kinda hoping for one of those extremely rare girl-turned-boy characters. Even if there is no romance between them the sympathetic bonding scenes would be hilarious.

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      1. This. I didn’t even know I wanted this until I read it. Lys. This. I don’t know whether I want to thank you or resent you for putting the idea into my mind, because I don’t know if Hon’yaku will actually do it or not. Have a like.

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  4. Somehow I think wolf-san didn’t hear the part about Jun being a Helward approved master blacksmith. I expected a larger reaction from him. Anyway thanks for the chapter!

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  5. At first I was confused when Hibicchi’s character transitioned from being timid to a-little-mischievous(?) It somehow felt weird to me..
    Oh well maybe it’s just me… Though I do know that her character started changing a few chapters earlier

    Your Note by the end made me understand the background better
    Thankies for the chapter and Your hard work
    One of the best Novels for me ❤


    1. It doesn’t feel all that weird to me. Hibiki was scarred by the events of her world transfer and subsequent enslavement so she’s slow about opening up and reventing to her original personality.

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  6. this was a really good chapter! I liked Ragnal poking fun of Jun, as well as your background story for this! Also, you’re a really good writer and I’d love to know how you go about making developments for this story. I’m very bad at planning things in advance whenever I try so your pacing is always impressive!

    Thanks again!


    1. It’s a lot of just idly thinking over things. As a kid, I developed a habit of drifting off into my own fantasy headspace when I’m bored. Like, literally/lying down perfectly still and just thinking through how a character thinks/feels through different scenarios I want to put him/her through.

      But to be more specific, I have a bunch of scenarios that I definitely want to do (we’re at, like, maybe 30-40% along that timeline for this story? Until I come up with more scenarios), and as I have more ideas I mentally insert them along that timeline. Probably most people would write them down… eeeey.
      Anyway, I don’t plan everything out in detail, because things change a lot as I write.
      The characters and how they interact with each other is something that always catches me off guard, and sometimes minor characters come with more backstories than I thought they had while I’m thinking through their actions.
      I guess that’s one tip. When planning, I put a lot of focus in character interactions (not just defining the relationship, but how their personalities clashing/meshing will trigger other situations), probably even more than events that happen. And if something I want to happen doesn’t seem right because of a character’s personality, I back off and rethink what he/she would do. Buuut I dunno if that’s just a personal stylistic thing for writers who are empaths, or if it’s maybe-helpful to all writers …
      For an empath writer, it’s all about telling the characters’ story, not about having the characters tell your story, so everything’s pretty loosely planned. Not everyone is like this, though. For some people, the opposite gives them a better result.

      The only real advice I can give is just write write write, and if it turns into something you don’t like, put it away for awhile and turn to the next idea. That’s the best way to pinpoint what works and doesn’t work for you. I mean, I definitely wrote some shtty mary-sue fiction crap for a while, but I never stopped making stories, even though I stopped writing for a while and they were just all in my head. I’d have to say, probably 250-ish stories were started, maybe even mostly thought through, and then thrown out before I got to today.

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  7. Good chapter! It was also nice to get some insights on the past development history for this story. To think Jun’s original template was so toxic of a character… yeah that sounds like you have come a long way. Good luck with flushing out the world more and more it sounds like Seimei’s plot saved this series XD

    I’m also surprised that Hibiki opening up wasn’t intentionally done as you captured it pretty well. Her situation really hammered in that the world isn’t so simple as Jun’s initial obliviousness towards the surroundings and raised the scope of the antagonists plans and overall mystery of what is going on that contrasts with Jun’s more of the moment asexual go with the flow mentality for non smithing related tasks 😀
    Well thanks for the chapter!


    1. I would love to ask him one question.

      In a world of magic…
      what makes him think objects are made of atoms? lol
      Since the Laws of Physics are already wonky, can you really assume objects are made of atoms and not ‘magicions’? 🙂


      1. .. because they have some of the same things that Earth has such as glass, water, breathable air (and therefore oxygen) and other stuff. ya know the fact that they aren’t dying from lack of oxygen, becoming dehydrated from not having any actual water and maybe the fact that they can actually stand on the ground. Because stuff like ‘magicions’ would be the energy that composes magic and there fore would have no mass and not able to be stood upon or drunk or eaten etc. Stupid questions deserve very detailed and very sarcastic answers.


      2. @Klackerer
        That was both wrong and pointlessly hostile. If things work the same at human scale, Occam’s Razor says they probably work the same at micro scale, so Seimei is right to assume as he does. But probably is not certainly. “Because magic” can be used to answer litterally any question if the author felt like it. I once read a story where putting some plants underground gave you breathable air because the plant element naturally purified the air element, not because of oxygen or CO2.


  8. capitol-> capital

    Capital is seed money or the city that is the center of government
    Capitol is only the city that is the center of government

    So unless Seimei has a city to sell, it’s capital. lol


    1. I think those to terms are supposed to be spelled the same ->capital. I mean I don’t spell Capital City as Capitol and I don’t know anyone else that does either. Though it might be a regional thing


  9. So we have Jun being the blacksmith, Hibiki being the apothecary/herbalist, and Seimei being the doctor/medical specialist.


  10. Hi! I love this story, I think it’s the best “other world” story I’ve ever read. Even without romance! Although I’m still hoping she gets together with Ragnall eventually, lol… Anyway, I wanted to ask you, if I could, what sort of outlining process do you go through with this story? Overall and chapter-by-chapter. Thank you for writing.


    1. My story process doesn’t really have a regulated process, but I can kind of break it down a bit.
      To start a story I usually go with a vague concept, like a certain type of MC or wanting to try a certain sub-genre (or sometimes, more often than I’d care to admit, I make up a title and go off that), and then I sit on it a while using my imagination I honed from being bored a lot as a kid, thinking about things I want to do with it, getting to know the characters, etc. etc.
      By the time I start writing, I usually have major plot points and some minor ones roughly planned out. Some are meticulously planned out, others more “this happens somehow” planned. Roughly, I have a good idea of major climaxes and most re-occurring characters.
      Chapter to chapter, since I have the plot points to kind of “aim” for (I don’t always hit the targets, though), I focus on what I want to happen within the limitations that I set, like word count and how much of an emotional rollercoaster I want in there, or not wanting to cram too much info into 1 chap. Most of it is written and planned right then and there, but when I have problems, I have to spend a lot of time getting into my char’s heads to understand how they’d react to things. It’s kind of like communing with your chars, but no incense or trippiness, so not as cool.
      The best way for me to do this is motionless and in bed, so admittedly I fall asleep a lot more than I should.
      So yeah, I have major plot points before I write, but I hand a lot over to the characters so … um. Things change a lot. Experience is the best way to learn how to mesh things together, and I’m always re-enacting scenes whenever I’m lying down about to go to sleep.
      To be honest, the best thing that happened to my writing is posting it online, so I actually, uh, write, instead of replay it in my head until I get bored.


  11. It’s starting to become frustrating how much you’re leaving the central hook of the story undeveloped and unconfronted. The gender bend angle rarely has an effect on Jun or provides meaningful obstacles to their goals, identity, and relationships. If you’re too nice to your characters, they can’t self-actualize, and the plot stumbles along.

    Your work is full of interesting ideas, but like in crafting a sword, you need more than a good ingot. There’s also a crucible, and a lot of heavy blows from a hammer.


    1. yeeah, I’m not sure what you’re expecting, but it’s not supposed to be a love-comi or existential-crisis drama, and Jun’s more asexual than the norm and was in denial through the first big arc, so he’s just not going to explore that on his own.
      Since the whole point of this story was to be a not-normal gendbend.
      That said, of course there’s not absolutely NO impact, and that is why we’re on the move toward a different environment that will have different stressors.
      It’s just the demon part kinda cropped up sooner than I expected and is bogging things down a tad in terms of char development, but pushing the world building along.
      It’s all very confusing and conflicting for me, just fyi


      1. Well you could have a guy who has a massive crush on Jun(like that apprentice) but actually confesses his feelings. Or as I’ve said before she could “explore” her body in detail, it could get her LESS terrified of her body.


      2. I’m not really looking to push the gender topic inorganically, and since this story isn’t ecchi or h, it’s just going to happen more slowly.
        I’m not just avoiding the topic, there really is more stuff that’s going to happen later, I’m just trying to say that if you’re expecting sexy times or sudden romantic drama/comedy, that’s just not going to happen, and unfortunately that stuff seems to be synonomous with gendbend.
        I’m going a different route, that’s all.


      3. It’s hard for tone to get across on the internet, ne?
        I didn’t take offense, in case that’s how it seemed, just that some people ARE looking for that kind of stuff in a gendbend, so I don’t want them waiting for it for another 100 chaps or so. And that the sexual identity part isn’t super high on the priority list, since the main character is like THAT, too.


    1. Different diet, different ecology, different navigation, different transportation, different technology, different hygiene, different laws, different culture, different expectations, different distances, different personal security standards, different views, different common phrases, different common knowledge, different ratio of things that will eat you, different fashions, different songs/movies/stories/religions/legends… There are a lot of things to get used to, and for the most part, gender isn’t going to be particularly relevant to anything that you will be doing until long after you have already gotten used to it just by living it ever day. Yes, there will be a mental reckoning to deal with, but even then, it can be mourned as part of a collective along with everything else that you have lost. And what’s more, Jun’s body was actually made on this side, so it is presumably possible(albeit prohibitively expensive and require more sophisticated magic-use then appears to be available) to have the body reconfigured. The “we can’t go back because magic can only “pull” and there is no magic on the other side to do so” reasoning doesn’t apply to modifying their bodies. So it might not even be permanent…

      That said, different people define themselves more or less strongly based upon their gender. Some people could change gender without really caring(note that this has nothing to do with actually wanting to be a different gender, this is purely about the extent to which someone just doesn’t care what gender they have.), some people would be pretty much comatose.

      Also note that sexual dimorphism is a real thing. So far I have been talking about gender in a rather specific sense. In a more general sense, if your gender changes, then the first thing you will do is fall over. So gender is probably the first and most immediate problem that you will encounter, but that is because your musculature and weight-distribution will be all off. I very much doubt that anyone is referring to requiring a different posture to stand up when they talk about adapting to a new gender…

      So I just want to say how absolutely lovely it is that this story is so realistic. It presents someone who doesn’t strongly define themselves by their gender and who has a subdued attitude to their sex drive. This person is thrown into a completely new situations, body included, and their body is not the most important thing in their life when they have to deal with bandits and monsters and economics that are all inclined end them, while their body is just kind of awkward and getting less so as they grow accustomed to using it to deal with aforementioned economics… So yes, it is an issue, but with the character in question it makes no sense that it would be at the top of the list and there is no sense in focusing the story on it.

      This is not a “transgender story”, it is an… “adventure of unfamiliarity story” with transgender in it. So transgeneder is very very remote from being “the central hook”.

      That said, there is a certain falseness inherent to literature criticism. An author should generally follow their inspiration. There is much to be said for being less indulgent and more coherent, and inspiration tends to be more indulgent and less coherent, but still, I feel that often stories lose their audience when authors try to chase popularity. Sometimes it works(Hollywood rakes it in constantly and it is difficult to find any passion at all in the whole place), but so often an author starts listening to feedback and changes their update schedule or focuses more on a popular character or starts steering things towards a theme that many of their fans like, and the author likely doesn’t realise why it is getting more difficult, the audience doesn’t realise why the quality is dropping, but everyone sort of agrees that the quality has dived and it isn’t worth it anymore.

      So really, the important thing is just that The author here has demonstrated a great ability to consistently produce entertaining content, so whatever they have been doing so far(including any inclinations to change. It is so easy to forget that there is a temporal component to established behaviour…) seems to work splendidly! Thus they probably shouldn’t place overmuch value in the opinions of one or two outspoken commenters… Unless that is where they have been getting all their ideas all this time…


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